This is the script for our next upcoming film, still in the works. I just wanted to share this just to remind everyone I'm still working on it.
Lead Detective: Erik
Partner Detective: Josh
Dead Party person. Natan
Sheriff Assistant: Gaby
Allisa (Girl from party who got interrogated): Gricel
Camera guy: Natan
(We’re going to record the voices on a separate device so we can hear ourselves talk) Sound guy: Erik
The scene starts with the camera zooming through the open door of a house a house playing loud music at a party.
Camera cut scenes to a party with the guests going all crazy, loud rave music, drinking, lots of food, then blending stuff, tv playing a movie, popcorn, violent pillow fight, and whispering junk like dares and stuff, they laugh all crazy and sneak out.
The camera angles up to the night sky and it comes down on.....
2 car guys, (Beemer and Jay)
Camera transitions from up high to down to the rear end of the cars as the cars are revving their engines. Both cars in one shot.
A quick shot for each driver as they look at each other, nod.
Camera from behind on the ground watches them peel out.
A short slow street race starts. Camera Sidewalk view.
After the drag race, two guys stay late and chat with each other talking about how this was much better than that lame party.
Beemer’s car is in the background playing some music.
Jay hears Beemer’s BMW revving the engine and they barely see the car peel out and drive off with the thief. (camera is behind them watching the car peel out)
(camera behind Beemer watches him dial 911 on his cell) He call the cops.
At the police station the lazy sheriff picks up the phone, goes “uhh’, and tells the assistant to “Give the job to the mystery crew. We only handle “real Cases” in this town.
Camera moves in Mystery Crew business card laying up on the Sheriff's desk.
Mystery crew member Erik picks up the old rotary phone ringing.
“uh uh, yeah that’s correct, ok right away. Wait... Do you take Debit?”
Camera angle swiftly moves to Erik’s partner (P).
and proceeds to yell, “Hey I need 20$ for pizza!” “Oh and the cops called, we have work tomorrow!” (Camera fades to day and the scene of the street where the drag race appears.)
The Mystery crew arrives a day later, in an old Mopar (Erik and (P)) camera watches them drive in. Drivers side. Erik comes out, While camera stares at his feet and moves up to his face while he close the door.
Camera looks at (P) quickly does the same.
Jay and Beemer are there waiting, Jay complains,
“What took you so long?”
“Relax buddy, we’re professionals, we know what we’re doing.”
(P) mutters to himself that the trail is all cold. He starts to investigate the road where the car was driven off look at the tire marks and take a cotton swab and put that in a baggie. Erik talks to the guys and asks questions in the background while (P) is inspecting the road. He says that the thief was maybe driving like a noob and trying to drag race, the two guys agree like they were scared. (since they don’t want to get fined for driving recklessly) Erik gets suspicious. (suspicious music)
(P)’s phone rings, he says it’s a call about a murder mystery and says he’d rather solve that one instead. “Good luck on finding your car, it’s definitely stolen, we’ll send you a bill in the mail.”
The mystery crew decides to ignore the fool whose car was stolen and go try to solve that case instead. Erik then says to Beemer, he may be in contact with him if he finds anything about his car. Maybe. Probably. Unlikely. Beemer and Jay feel abandoned.
As the mystery crew drives over to the river to investigate the dead body and the surrounding area. the Sheriff ( and her assistant are there) says this girl is dead from stab wounds all over the body. But (P) figures out that the murderer only made it look like a stabbing murder, and put ripped up weenies and ketchup all over her. And as he investigates this further by looking at the rocks and the broken plants, he imagines that the girl drove there, fell out of the car dead for some reason, and then someone took her car. Erik wonders if there is a car thief on the loose. (The girl driving to the river, falling out unconscious and having her car stolen will be like a dream sequence. kind of how CSI does it.)
The Mystery Crew takes the body to the lab in a black bag and input the dna data into the computer (using a scanner to scan the hair. Erik asks why did they have to bring in the whole body if all they needed was a hair. (P) was like, “Don’t question my methods!”) the loading data says, “data compiling, please wait 8867682376 years for results. Erik gets annoyed how long it’s taking and walks over to the server to do this manually. later.... find out she was just injected with a serum that makes her seem dead and it took effect after she was driving home maybe, fell out of the car when some joyrider took her car. (another Dream Sequence) The computer tells them all that from a DNA Hair sample.
So now they go out looking for two missing cars and who drugged this girl. The “dead” girl wakes up with a terrible hangover wrapped in a bag. she can’t get out. no one sees her. She says, Hello?” The camera fades out into a police station.
The Mystery Crew then goes to the DMV to see if they’ve seen this “Dead” girls car and what hopes to find what it looks like. Cop investigates on their computer system, but according to the records, she doesn’t own a car, or even a license, or even a social security number.
So Mystery crew and sheriff assistant drives the one of the girls’ house (Alisa) for an official on the spot interrogation. Erik busts down the door. Fails and just knocks instead. When the mother lets them in, they pull out the official paperwork and the mom starts crying saying. “Ohh my baby’s a criminal, I always knew she had a bad side!” And runs out the house.
The Sheriff’s assistant ties the suspect (alisa) to the chair.
Erik -”Where were you on the night of the 27th? Huh! Answer me punk, Say something?!”
ALisa - “Um I don’t know, what month?”
Erik - “I’ll make this easier for you Ally! Yesterday. where. where. you?”
Alisa - “I was at a party, behaving and having fun, my mom picked me up at 12:00, she can verify...”
Erik thinks she is lying (sherlock holmes moment, voice in his head, (She’s shaking her hand, refuses to look at him, voice is higher pitch. But in reality she just had something stuck in her eye that made her uncomfortable. and was scared at erik’s knife.) (P) plays good cop. Erik Bad cop. But she pretty much lies about everything. “We were just having a very safe party, watching movies and doing each others nails.... and stuff like that, what more do you want?” Erik then pretends to tip the chair over and she get’s really scared and spills everything. He finds out it was a dare to steal a car, and when Iris’ friends found her, they drugged her so she wouldn’t remember anything. They were all arrested. The girls also took the car and tried to drive it into the river. bye bye BMW.
(P), was like, “It’s ok it’ll be alright” and slaps handcuffs on her, “After you serve time in juvenile hall of course.” and they both but a bag over her head and carry her out, and put her in the trunk of the Mopar A.
Mystery crew now realizes that the car “dead” girl stole the car from Beemer and and now it’s in the river. So they go look for it at the river to fish it out when Zerin then sees a BMW parked like 10 feet away and asks (P) what kind of car was it they were looking for? Erik decides to close this case and report it.
As the chief of Mystery Crew reads the report, says everything looks good, but asks where the dead girl is.. Apparently everyone else forgot about her so the Sheriff goes to the dead body place and hears her singing “daisy” and gets her out, but she’s barely alive so the Sheriff rushes her to the emergency room. DR. Whaaat? comes in and says he can save her, but he needs to get drunk first, so he drinks a bottle and slams it on the ground. then he gets to work with this skill saw, but his assistant says he has the wrong tool, and he’s like, “you’re right”, and pulls out the sawzall. the show ends with a fadeout of a hospital. and the theme song from House. Whatever that song is.
(After the credits finish, Erik goes to explain to Beemer what happened to the car.
Beemer, “So my car is in the river?”
ERIK: The good news is the crane company offered to buy it for a 100$>”
Beemer> Well it’s better than nothing.
Beemer> Well it’s better than nothing.
Erik pays Beemer and then goes back to his newly purchased BMW and drives off.